June 4, 2010
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A Soldier's Tale
About two months ago, I started writing a book with my spare time after work and at the end of every day, some days throughout the day.The book was based on a story that was developed over the course of yeeeears of chat RP, when I was younger.
I wanted to make something of it for a long time since then but several attempts met PC crashes. Not this time, though. This time, things have gone well toward that effort.About 2 weeks ago, a number of people started to take interest in it, so I made a promise to release a preview of it, once I was done with the section I was writing.
A couple days ago, I finished that section and spent the last two days editing and preparing the preview document. I published it on Facebook, this afternoon, and someone suggested I post it here, too.
You can download/read it here.
It's called Mur Al'Sheen: A Sought Redemption.
It's the first of of what will be a 2-3 book series. The title means "A Soldier's Tale" or "Tale of a Soldier" in the mother language of the overall main character,
also written for the book.
To avoid being repetitive, I won't summarize the story because there's a summary at the very start of the preview document.Enjoy!

Comments (24)
What languages do you study? I couldn't help but notice your interests on the side. Right now I'm teaching myself Arabic and Spanish.
@j_u_n_ebug -
I studied French & Japanese in school. I'm currently studying Chinese and trying to polish up Japanese.
I tried to learn Korean, but it's totally unreadable to me, for reasons unknown.
I'm gonna download it, but I'm impatient. What language are the words "Mur Al'Sheen" in?
@OhItWontBeForever -
The native language of the main character, elements of which specifically written for the books.
It's not a language of Earth, however I used basic elements of languages I've heard or studied.
For the main character's language, I wanted an arabic or egyptian feel to the spoken element (which might be why it looked familiar but non sensible to you
) of it, and a radical+ ideographic feel to the written element. I was supposed to include the title in Rhoyan text (that's the language's name) in the cover art, but didn't really have time to sprawl it out and make some to include.
I wrote elements of the 2 or 3 languages that are heard most, as I feel this lends some authenticity to a truly science-fiction story.
Now watch me break down the title's name, according to the language it's in: "Mur"(myoor)= Tale, Story.
Al' (Ahl)= possessive prefix for individual nouns. Like an 's only prepositional and for nouns that describe an individual unit.It can also be considered a possessive "of". Probably easy to think of it that way since it's written between the noun and the object it possesses, somewhat like of is used in English.
There is also a possessive "Da'" prefix for collective nouns (nouns that are used as groups, institutions, more than one individual in association, or other collective terms).
As an example a word you wont find in this text but later in the book: Makh Da'Sheen, a title that refers to regular army.
Sheen (she-n)= Soldier, Fighter, Warrior, Combatant.
Together it makes Soldier's Tale.. or Tale of a Soldier. I titled it in the book's language because it makes a more interesting title than it's English translation.
:3. I thought this all out pretty far.
This is simply awesome.
Yeah it looked familiar but didn't make sense, so I was wondering if you knew more Arabic than me! We have the whole Al thing, but we use - rather than ' after the Al. It's in my surname.
@OhItWontBeForever -
I see I see
. Well I thought of my possessive prefixes, actually after hearing the way arabic uses "al". I know its usually hyphenated like when I first heard it used to spell out Saddam husein's whole name (Saddam Hussein al-Tikriti), the al-Tikriti I gather being "of Tikrit", the place of his birth.
I designed it as a possessive, so I thought I'd smash it together with an apostrophe, the way English uses it. And bam. I have a authentic sounding language element.
When the original story was thought of, the only one I had was "Da'", as I hadn't titled the story yet.
Tikritiiii. Yep.
Srsly, you're awesum.
@OhItWontBeForever -
CHILLIN'.
I am watching Occupation 101, you seen it?
@OhItWontBeForever -
Nope
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-SbjAanvUqs&feature=related
It's about the Israel-Palestine conflict. It's eye-opening.
@OhItWontBeForever -
I wonder, do I reaaally wanna watch that. I'm at a loss for words on that subject, and I generally don't express my specific opinion on it, cuz that would be bad xD.
I don't either. I have no knowledge of it. That's why I'm watching this. It tells the truth.
@OhItWontBeForever -
That's a conflict that's followed people here since forever. The only thing I can say about it is that if Israel is destroyed, like it ends up in the bible, apparently, then it's because of their behavior up to date.
Nobody around them can do it, though. So I can't see how it'd even happen.
GOD KNOWSSSSSS.
@OhItWontBeForever -
I dunno. I'm just wanting to see all the conflicts on this planet blow over or end already. I really don't care what countries end up gone. If the world's lines get redrawn I think that's better than them insinuating fighting and fighting half way for a long period of time, placing tons of lives at risk.
hmm. Now that's a view I've never encountered before!
@OhItWontBeForever -
I'm sure alot of people are just sick of always hearing about israel and palestine.. north and south korea.. most of africa.
There doesn't seem to be an end to these conflicts and all that's happening are people dying in between.
That's true. Poor people. D:
@OhItWontBeForever -
Sooo if I ever do get around to the whole taking over Earth thing.. you can pretty much expect an abrupt end to all those conflicts
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You gonna kill them?
@OhItWontBeForever -
Nah. Not unless they wont stop fighting each other.
So if they don't stop?
@OhItWontBeForever -
Put it this way. I have designs for a bloodless takeover. I have no room for those who persist in bloodshed, though.
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